IOC
Here is my planning:
And here is my vocaroo, my computer didn't start recording until like thirty seconds in, all you missed was me saying my name and the name of the book. Also sorry for making yall listen to my nasally voice. (click hyperlink)
Criterion A: 7. The commentary shows a good understanding of the text as a whole, however there where parts where I was not specific or stumbled over some aspects of the plot. I made sure to include many references and quotes from the texts that I analyzed well, however I probably should have included more parts where I related the quotes back to my thesis.
Criterion B: 5. My main two literary effects were dialogue and exposition, not the most impressive literary aspects. However I believe I did a good job explaining the effect of the dialogue between Moira and Offred, then the exposition between Offred and her mother very well.
Criterion C: 4. I formatted this well, starting with an introduction with a thesis. Then I had three body 'paragraphs' with topic sentences. Then I finished off with a conclusion. I probably should have related the bodies more to the thesis throughout.
Criterion D: 4. I spoke in a generally relaxed yet formal tone throughout. However I'm only human, I stumbled over and repeated some words. I burped quite loudly halfway through, and I made a Saturdays are for the boys joke. I was probably a bit too relaxed.
Overall that's a 20/30 which isn't that bad, especially considering how little I remember from The Handmaid's Tale
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ReplyDeleteA: 6
B: 5
C: 4
D: 4
I like the background you give and that you pretty much jump right in (be careful that you aren't spending too much time giving background)- you sound calm and organized. I think you've got a great use of devices here, but keep linking back to the overall purpose of the passage. That's really the effect. Keep thinking...why is Atwood doing what she's doing in the passage? How do you know? I also think you have clear organization in your planning, but thinking about the two questions I mention will help keep it more organized orally. As far as analysis/devices- use the big 5: https://www.thinkib.net/englishalanglit/page/11116/the-big-5. I'd suggest reviewing the IOC resources I provided, as well as what we did during the IOC review session.
The organization was great, but I believe you could work on that more, especially with (as you stated) tying your points back to the thesis statement. Other than that I believed it was well done, and your relaxing tone is something you should keep on the actual IOC.
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